Is this writing good or is it ok? It's a part of a story I am currently writing.?

It’s written in script format, but the copy paste to yahoo screwed up the format.

INT. TOP FLOOR PENT ROOM – CASINO – NIGHT

A plump bald man smokes a large cigar while sitting behind his large wooden desk in a small dark room. He is wearing a really fancy grey and blue tuxedo his name is David Tulen and he is in charge of bounties that he places out for people to kill. He is surrounded by 8 men with guns in their hands for protection as well.

Behind him on his wall rests a large red flag with a large white star on it. He is also the owner of many of the casinos and hotels in the area. He pretty much owns the city.

To his left is his right hand man standing with two katanas wrapped to his back. This man is also wearing a black tuxedo and has short black hair with a strict intimidating look. Both katana hand grips display the star logo. His name is Nicholas Polon (Nicknamed Eckhard for his sword skills).

DAVID

What bounties have come in so far Eckhard?

ECKHARD

So far we have had Tim Yellis, Greg Hunters, Alex Steller, and…

SIMONS

[walks into the room interrupting Eckhard] Next time you send me on a bounty make sure Striker doesn’t get the same damn bounty!

The men in the room all point their guns at Simons. He stops in his place and smiles raising his hands up.

DAIVD

[grinning at Simons] What’s the matter Simons? My men frighten you?

SIMONS

[still slowly raising his up passing by his waist] No. Not at….ALL!

7.

Simons quickly reaches for a sniper rifle that’s strapped to him and shoots it twice towards the men. The two bullets ricochet off the walls in the room and make their way through each of the men’s skulls in a split second. The men all fall to the ground.

The bullets are about to hit David, but Eckhard swings out his katanas and stops the bullets on impact right in front of David’s face.

SIMONS

[Smiling at David and Eckhard] I guess you need new henchman..preferably better than these ones. And the last. [walks up to David's desk and puts his sniper rifle strapback on him]

Eckhard slides his katanas back in to their scabbards.

DAVID

[putting out his cigar in the ash trey] You can never take a joke..that’s what I like about you. Now what was your complaint?

Simons slams his hands down on to the desk and looks at David vigorously. A figure walks into the room, but is covered by a shadow making it difficult to tell who he is. All we can see is a red eye glimmer in the dark.

STRIKER

[walks out of the shadows to reveal himself] He’s complaining about how I beat him to his bounty. I spotted him a quarter mile away on a mountain top after I finished the job. [walks up to the desk]…I’ll take that 0 now.
Should have mentioned this is an anime haha

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What kind of icon is used to represent a non-Windows program?

Windows Logo
Blank Window
Red Flag
None of the above

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Are you a political racist?

As a democrate, do you shun the stupid pig heady republicans for being republicans? Thats right, you don’t know the people behind the mask, just that their banner waves red. You laugh at their conspiracy theories, the fear mongering, while sitting behind the trenchs of your proudly blue flag.

As a republican, do you laugh at the blind eyed democrats? Do you laugh that they do what you do, but to a much worse degree and can’t even consider reponsibility or blame for it? The blind leading the blind, you think.. while proudly sitting in your trench, waving the red flag.

Reality check. Democrates are Americans. Republicans are Americans. And more importantly than ever, they are all people with loved ones. Everyone in America is on the same boat. I don’t care if you hold up a red or blue flag, but I do care if you start attacking 1 another with baseless, senseless, and arrogant insults. Whether you like it or not, your brothers and sisters. If you don’t stand united, no one else will stand united with you. No one else will fight for America but you. If we get invaded today, that guy your calling a loser who’s stupid is going to be the only one standing with you in the trenchs, because no one else will defend our great country.

Are you a political racist? If you are.. do you think its time for a change?

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Are you a political racist?

As a democrate, do you shun the stupid pig heady republicans for being republicans? Thats right, you don’t know the people behind the mask, just that their banner waves red. You laugh at their conspiracy theories, the fear mongering, while sitting behind the trenchs of your proudly blue flag.

As a republican, do you laugh at the blind eyed democrats? Do you laugh that they do what you do, but to a much worse degree and can’t even consider reponsibility or blame for it? The blind leading the blind, you think.. while proudly sitting in your trench, waving the red flag.

Reality check. Democrates are Americans. Republicans are Americans. And more importantly than ever, they are all people with loved ones. Everyone in America is on the same boat. I don’t care if you hold up a red or blue flag, but I do care if you start attacking 1 another with baseless, senseless, and arrogant insults. Whether you like it or not, your brothers and sisters. If you don’t stand united, no one else will stand united with you. No one else will fight for America but you. If we get invaded today, that guy your calling a loser who’s stupid is going to be the only one standing with you in the trenchs, because no one else will defend our great country.

Are you a political racist? If you are.. do you think its time for a change?

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Authentic coach bag..or too good to to true?

I was recently gifted "coach" bag for Christmas. I know I’m being OCD about it, but it kind of bothers me. I researched into it some more and there were some sites that say my handbag would be a knock off and some sites suggested its real.
-It came with plastic wrapped handles, which most say its a big red flag thats it’s a fake, but others say its to prevent scratches.

-It has a leather patch on the front that says "Coach Est. 1941" which makes it seem authentic.

-There’s the symbolic logo with the horse and carriage on it, and it looks EXACTLY like the logo, and I assume fake ones can’t do that..

But I’m unsure and was wondering if anyone who owns or knows a lot about Coach bags, would be a great help! Thanks xx
The leather patch is on the outside. But there’s one on the inside that reads that "we only use the finest products" and all that. and there’s a serial number. But I plan on going to the Coach kiosk at macys soon to find out but thanks for all the answers (:

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Can you interpret my blood test?

The results that are marked High:

(I put the normal ranges in parenthesis )

RDW 15.4 (11.5-14.5 %)

Monocytes 0.7 (0.11-0.59 thou/uL) (I have not been sick)

Carbon Dioxide 33 (22-30 mmol/L)

AST 52 (14-36 U/L)

ALT 63 (7-56 U/L)

And my GFR-MDRD is 70 (Greater than 90 mL/min/1.73 m2)

(I read that a score of 70 means that I have mild kidney damage)

These results were normal but at the high end of normal:

WBC was 9.1 (4.8-10.8)

Sodium 145 (137-145 mmol/L)

Glucose 100 (70-110 mg/dL) (this was after a 13 hour fast)

Cholesterol was good at 159 but the other lipid results were not good.

I have Fibromyalgia and I’ve had a couple dr’s through the years tell me that I might have an auto-immune disorder. I have a lot of daily pain and fatigue .My last ANA was 1:80 Speckled Pattern.

Do my abnormal results raise a red flag or are they too close to normal to be concerned? Are any of these results indicative of a disease or condition?

Thank you!!!
Agnodice, I appreciate your feedback on these results!! That was great. Only one thing though, I haven’t had a recent infection or been sick, as you mentioned.

Which auto-immune diseases bother the liver and kidney’s besides Lupus? When my dad was alive he had SLE and I have a cousin that is from my mom’s side that has SLE as well. I don’t know if it’s hereditary or not, but I thought I’d mention it.

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How can I get my own auto insurance and still be decently affordable?

So im 20 years old almost 21 living at home and ready to get my own auto insurance. My daily driver is a 1999 s-10 Blazer and for my playtime car im looking into a 2005 GTO. I know instantly thats a red flag cause im young, but thats why I want my own insurance. But the thing is….I talked to the insurance writer and they told me that even if im on my own insurance, if something serious happens to me in a auto related accident, they can still come after my parents assets and insurance since I live at home still. Is this true? also any tips for a young guy looking for independence with his own insurance?

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Is "Redline, Inc." in Arizona a scam?

I applied on careerbuilder.com for this position in "marketing" and "promotions". Two days later they called me for an interview. I’m kind of weary of this company since there are a couple of scammer companies taking applicants. I know "Fiat Lux Enterprises" and "Axis" is definitely a scam company but I’m not sure about "Redline Incorporated". Here’s why I ask…

They told me I’d have to go to an interview near 48th St. & Southern in Tempe. That was a red flag since "Axis" is on 48th St. & Broadway. The woman that called mistakenly said the offices were on 48th St. & Broadway at first but when I looked up the address it was actually 48th St. & Southern. Another red flag. Then I automatically asked what I would be doing because I have been scammed before and didn’t want to be stuck out trying to sell to strangers in a neighborhood. She said I wouldn’t do anything like that, maybe going to set up events. They specialized in automotive and racing and she said they’ve been working with "NASCAR" then I remembered when Fiat Lux called me, they mentioned Pepsi and NASCAR as well. Another red flag. I’ve done research but found not much other than there was a "Red Line Events" that turned out to be a scam. Anyway, I cancelled my interview so if anyone can help me out I’d greatly appreciate it!

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Tell me what you think!?

This guy I met playing on checkers online. Well he’s six years younger than me and lives in another state. We met up somehow people just happen to steal his credit card out of his work locker & someone siffered gas out of his car too. Red flag popped up but ignored it and had sex in the back of my car.I know crazy right it is so out of character for me. Well its been 2 weeks since then took him a week to say I love you again. Kept coming up with excuses to not talk to me other than texting. He calls me a week after the fact and says he’s sorry that he hasnt talk to me he’s been really stressed out and he loves me. then we are back to texting until today he calls to check on me tell me hes bein swore in to the army this friday & he gonna be working out @ the gym for the next couple of days ohh and he loves me. I think I made a HUGE mistake!! What do you think his deal is?

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Stupid end to Arca race?

Does anyone else feel that Arca should have just ended the race under caution if they were going to only give the guys one lap to go for the win?

I was expecting a green-white-checker,but they dropped the green flag and it was the final lap.It takes these cars 1 lap just to get up to speed.Stupid move by Arca-I wouldn’t have waited around during that long red flag if I had known that crap.Guess that’s why i’m a NASCAR fan and not an Arca fan.

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